https://youtu.be/rlyBVJdmTsc
2. I feedback that people really liked about my elevator pitch was that I provided statistics about my specific industry and how it is constantly growing year in and year out. As well as the potential of having my business in Gainesville where it will have no other restaurants like it. None of the feedback I got surprised me and none of it made me feel silly.
3. What stood out to me the most was that my first attempt of an elevator pitch was a tad bit too long, also had a long awkward pauses where I was out of the camera which was not good. I fixed all these errors in my revised elevator pitch.
Hey David I really enjoyed watching your elevator pitch. I think you used your feedback from your fist one and used it efficiently to make adjustments. I like how you added some statistics in your second elevator pitch because it makes your product that you are pursuing seem more legit and reliable. I think the small adjustments you made, like making it more brief and fixing some small mistakes really gave you a good final pitch.
ReplyDeleteHey David,
ReplyDeleteI agree with the comments that stated how giving statistics really improved your first elevator pitch and decided it would be good a good idea to include some in my own pitch as well. I like how you carried it to the second pitch and refined them a little bit. I had the same issues with my first pitch not being as fluent as my second one and I think you fixed that issue pretty efficiently with the second pitch.
Hi David,
ReplyDeleteI think this is a really good elevator pitch. I can tell that you did your research on your idea. Your use of statistics made your pitch seem very credible and factual. Also, I like that you were looking at the camera/audience for the whole time. I think that there is definitely a market for a healthy fast food place in Gainesville. However, I think you might find that using locally sourced ingredients is expensive and logistically complicated.